Sunday, 15 November 2009

My TRIP TO DISNEYLAND

Last year I went to disneyland. I went on a very scary ride that I almoost peed my pants. I saw a cute girl and she asked me to the Tunnel of Love . Then when we got into the tunnel she pushed me into the water for no reason. I did not now how to swim so I just screamed for help. The girl shook her head and asked me why are you in there. That was all I remembered. Meanwhile, as I was struggling frantically in the water, she reached out her hand to me and said,"Oh, My Gosh! What am I doing to such a nice guy like you. Here--take my hand!" Then when I wok up and I was in a hospital. The girl was sitting next to me and was holding mey hand and praying. She said that she was extremely sorry. We became good friends.
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3 comments:

  1. Miki23 November 2009 at 21:39

    Nice love story,buddy. Sorry for turning it into one but I think it is great. XD

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  2. Multimedia Teacher Dude24 November 2009 at 21:47

    A good story, Tevin! However, I think if you change the final two lines you could end up with a much more powerful story. Of course you're free to keep it as is. However, if you stay in the present, so to speak--in the hospital setting--rather than the future--"we became..."--your story will be tighter. Good links, too. Mr. P

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  3. B29 November 2009 at 21:37

    I really want to go to the Disneyland. But I don't want a scary ride. I feel like you are influenced by Miki hope you don't and it's a cute story!

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